Poetry Space Competition 2012 - The Results
Judge : Cheryl Moskowitz
First Prize: Karen Harvey
Second Prize: Julia O'Brien
Third Prize: David Mark Williams
Highly Commended:
A Voice From England - Peter Gillott
Gorilla - David C. Johnson
Encounter at the Tea Tent - Diane Jackman
Early Flowering - Julia McGuiness
Night Ride - Carolyn O'Connell
Ana's View - Margaret Eddershaw
John - in Memoriam - Susan Latimer
Also for inclusion in the anthology:
Not Gilbert's - Misha Carder
Criminal Record - George Stein
How You See - Julia O'Brien
Midnight Encounters - Mike Lee
Poker Man - Julia O'Brien
Ashes and Cries are Much the Same - Judy Dinnen
Dreams of Dead Woman's Handbags - Johanna Boal
Skin of My Skin - Julia O'Brien
Butterfly Blood - Gwen Seabourne
Narcissus at the Window - Margaret Eddershaw
The above poems will be published in Words that Signify: Poems from Poetry Space Competition 2012 edited by Susan Jane Sims. Publication date: November 2012.
The top three winning poems:
Missing
i.
Frantically
he searched their hotel
room but he
couldn’t find her
even though
the door was
locked on
the inside.
He ran out
onto the balcony peering
through the
darkness at the next,
wondering if
she had jumped ship.
If only he’d
looked up,
he might
have noticed
one small
white feather
sashaying
earthward.
ii.
Later, after
many phone calls
and hours of
pacing the floor
he slumped
into a deep sleep.
Had he still
been awake
as the sun
rose
he would
have heard the flutter
as she
returned and
perched on
the hand rail.
©
Karen Harvey
Mussel
Squatting
alone on a jut in the bay,
you
select the oldest,
the
one whose rough crust
displays
a range of blue hues
rich
as the Ming in your grandmother’s cabinet.
Wrenched
from its clump with a swift twist,
you
grip the mussel, crab-like,
eye
only for this activity,
ear
full of sea waves,
scrunch
of rock on shell.
How
it would spit its salt juice on impact,
how
there was a kind of satisfaction
in
the sensation of being sprayed in this way,
you
could never have thought
of
putting into words
until
now.
Sometimes
it’s a tough business
to
prize the wings apart:
the
animal still bound at the tip
of
its lip by a clutch of seaweed beard.
In this sunset flesh feels warmer
than
the finger which strokes,
searches
- each time a held breath -
for
the grit of a sea pearl.
Each
time a winner.
Dead
shell flicked into black water,
you
study your booty from this angle, that.
Much
later, you’ll trek through the bracken
back
up the hill to the jingle
of
pearls in your pocket.
© Julia O’Brien
The Hidden Boy
In this
picture, there is a hidden boy.
You will have
to look closely to see him.
His ghostly
outline is faded into a huddle of gorse bushes,
where he
crouches, watching whatever unfolds
as though on
a small screen, his eyes yellow petals,
his skin a
burr of thorns.
He can remain
like this for hours,
pleased to be
as silent as wood or stone,
sustained on
the scent of coconut.
The family
eating their picnic on the grass
are unaware
they are being watched.
Their eyes
are fixed on the fine view,
the estuary
spread below them.
The boy
records everything they do,
the loud food
they stuff their faces with,
their
incessant, breezy chatter.
When they
have gone, leaving their litter,
a vacuum of
quiet, he will come out of hiding,
his see through
bones showing only a clear sky,
his mouth
clamped tight on a blue tongue.
© David Mark Willams
Reactions from our top three prizewinners on their success:
"I met Sue several years ago on a writing retreat and I have
enjoyed following Poetry Space from the outset, so I was absolutely over the
moon to hear that I had come first in the Poetry Space competition this year." Karen Harvey
"A
generous prize, publication online and
in print: this is a wonderful surprise, an honour and an encouraging affirmation
of my sometimes-fragile writerly self. A big thank you to Poetry Space, and to
Cheryl for selecting my poem." Julia O'Brien
"That's such wonderful news. I am
absolutely delighted. It's this kind of recognition that helps to
keep one going". David Mark Williams
Judging Overview and Report –
What a privilege, and pleasure, this
business of judging a poetry competition! It’s impossible to resist that
initial urge to tear open the package of entries and do everything in a rush.
Skim the titles, gallop too fast past an extraordinary range of images,
thoughts and ideas. But then there is the settling in for the long slow
consideration and time taken to simply to bask in the wonder of the human mind
and its capacity to find endlessly ways of crafting a few words to convey
important truths and feelings, so often with a delicious sense of surprise,
beauty and humour. I read and re-read each and every poem, both silently and
aloud. I paused in the process to allow
each poem to penetrate in the way that it might. I set them aside to see what
lingered. Navigating through the pile again it was easier to see which poems
called me back, refusing to be discarded.
For this year’s Poetry Space Competition
there were many wonderful poems written on time-honoured subjects: love, loss, war,
animals, nature, relationships, the changing seasons, as well as poems dealing
with more quintessentially modern or unusual themes: DNA, redundancy, TV chefs,
Disneyland parades, the wonders of tomatoes, mangoes as the object of original
sin and temptation in the form of banoffee pie. Not surprisingly, with the kind
of weather that has dominated a good deal of 2012 in this part of the globe,
there were also plenty of poems that featured rain.
Ultimately, the poems that impressed me the
most were those that dealt with their subjects, however common or unusual, in
unexpected ways. Though many of the poems dealt with difficult subject matter
and highly complex themes I came to most admire poems
that found ways to express meaning with the clearest and simplest of language.
Amongst the highly commended, two of the
poems featured women driving cars. ‘Ana’s View’ is a beautiful portrait of a
woman whose tired cancer-ridden body has come to mirror the aged rust-afflicted
red Fiat car that she loves. Their final parting at a favourite seaside
destination is a powerful and moving demonstration of letting go. In ‘Night
Ride’ there is a different kind of vulnerability as a pregnant woman drives
through a blizzard to make it home. I liked both ‘Gorilla’, a clever critique
on the perils of rhyme, and ‘Encounter at the tea tent’ which pokes fun at the
British tendency for caricaturizing clergy, for their wryness and wit. To write
an elegy that works convincingly without gushing is one of the hardest things
to do in poetry. ‘A Voice from England’ and ‘John – In Memorium’ both succeed
exceedingly well in this respect. The former, written in the voice of a young WWII
soldier returning home on hearing news of his mother’s death, manages to
combine a conversational tone with some quite formal poetic imagery which feels
absolutely right for the subject and period it is written about. ‘John – In
Memorium’ written about the poet’s brother, is a tenderly drawn portrait of
sibling relationships and childhood memories which uses humour to good effect. And
finally, ‘Early Flowering’, is a sonnet which uses its form and language
extremely well to paint a picture of hope and success that is dashed by
disappointment and the pain of redundancy.
Though quite varied in their subject
matter, the three winning poems all share a ghostly quality. They are poems
that leave a trace of themselves behind after reading. There was something
discomforting and unnerving about all of these poems and that is what made them
strong. A good poem should attach itself to the reader, get under the skin, and
connect to partly known or remembered experiences. A good poem has you nodding or sighing in such
a way that says ‘Ah yes, I knew that!’ even when the poem is about something
you might never even have dreamt of before.
In third place, ‘The Hidden Boy’ is a
deliciously mysterious poem that somehow manages to be delightful and
heartbreaking all at the same time. On
the surface it is simply a poem about a photograph, one of those pictures that,
if you look closely enough at, suggest things are present that might not really
be there. In this picture a family is having a picnic, that is clear, but there
is some kind of trick of light perhaps, a ghostly outline that is faded into a huddle of gorse bushes
that seems to be a boy watching them. Within this impressively spare and held
back narrative the poet lets us know that both the boy and the group he is
watching are, or should be, related but will always be at a distance.
Second prize goes to ‘Mussel’, a visceral
poem with real muscle that describes
the finding and opening of this shelled sea creature, but does so much more
than that. For me what makes this an expansive poem, one that is much larger
than the subject matter itself, is the way that discovering and getting inside
the mussel seems to work as a metaphor for childhood, loss of innocence,
maturity and growth. The whole of life is contained here in the Ming in your grandmother’s cabinet… scrunch of rock on shell… the jingle of
pearls in your pocket.
And finally, ‘Missing’, the first prize
winner, is a deceptively brief poem written in two parts. It looks wispy, even
inconsequential, on the page because of its brevity perhaps, or because it is
split in two or maybe something to do with the quality of the title, but reading
it leaves one with a deep and inescapable sense of longing and regret.
Something or someone is missing, as the title suggests, but we can’t quite
decide whether it is a person, a lover or maybe just a bird that has flown. There is a breathlessness and an urgency in
the language, Frantically he searched
their hotel… If only he’d looked up… Had he still been awake… he would have
heard... The overall effect is one of a beautiful sadness, a feeling of
having loved and lost, and the image at the end of the first part is one that,
so simple and perfectly realized, will never leave me - one small white feather/sashaying earthward.
Cheryl Moskowitz, August 2012
Warmest thanks to everyone who entered this year. Poetry Space Competition 2013 will be judged by Martyn Crucefix and will open for entries on November 1st 2012.